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发表于 2012-4-22 21:56:37 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式 来自: INNA

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How to educate children is a chronic problem that bothers scholars, teachers and parents. Some people claim that rewarding can help children to cultivate a good habit while others argue that punishing is a more effective way. From my perspective, both of the two approaches have their merits and demerits.



On the one hand, the benefits of rewarding can not be denied. Obviously, rewarding could stimulate the activity of children to behave in a honest and integrate way. Children, by nature, have a sense of competition. They are earge(拼写错误了,eager, 本来想用long for的) to win any price in order to standing out of their peers. Through a proper price and some deliberate guidence, they can be taught to act in a good manner. However, if such method applies for a long item, it would be not conducive to children's mental development. They would be unwilling to participate in activities without paid-back.



On the other hand, punishing for misbehavior has its own advantages and disadvantages.(这句话记不起来了,大概是这么写的) . Through a mechnaism of punishment, children can learn to distinguish a good manner and a bad manner, which definitely helps to reduce juvenile delinquency. Nevertheless, it would be detrimental to the physical and psychological development of children if punishment is the sole approach.(这句话也有点模糊了,大概是这么写的) Punishing all the time without any appreciation could make children be bully and aggressive, and sometimes even go astray.



Given the reasons listed above, I would conclude that neither of the two methodologies are flawless. What we should do is to strike a wise balance between rewarding and punishing and take the advantages of the two approaches to guide children to grow up healthly.



考完的感觉,两个理由段有点展开不够,拼写错误还好,应该不是太多。结尾段有点蹉。

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发表于 2012-4-22 23:43:56 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA


6-6.5

没有找到欧美人的那种习惯语句,基本上不太可能7

LZ还是在看中国人写的作文教材?看看英美本土人写的作文教材才有可能冲7

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发表于 2012-4-23 07:00:37 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA


1、win any price?希望是楼主打错了?
2、逻辑上不够严谨。

个人感觉,呵呵!瞎评的!


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发表于 2012-4-23 11:17:04 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA


跟楼主一比,觉得我都没什么大词。。


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发表于 2012-4-23 17:41:59 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA


读了一遍,发现10个以上的单词我都不认识。


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发表于 2012-4-24 02:49:42 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA


不忍心打击,但是感觉应该是6.5分把。语法错误还是有一些的。有些句子没明白什么意思。


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发表于 2012-4-24 05:36:52 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA


个人感觉6分

coherence: 6 逻辑不够严谨, 也不清晰:
词汇:7  虽然有些大词, 但是很多词用得不地道
语法: 6
合题: 6


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发表于 2012-4-24 10:51:21 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA


How to educate children is a chronic problem that bothers scholars, teachers and parents. Some people claim that rewarding can help children to cultivate a good habit while others argue that punishing is a more effective way. From my perspective, both of the two approaches have their merits and demerits.

On the(no "the") one hand, the benefits of rewarding can not be denied(ignored?). Obviously, rewarding could stimulate the activity of children to behave in a honest and integrate way. Children, by nature, have a sense of competition. They are earge(拼写错误了,eager, 本来想用long for的) to win any price in order to standing out of their peers. Through a proper price and some deliberate guidence, they can be taught to act in a good manner. However, if such method applies for a long item(term?), it would be not (not be) conducive to children's mental development. They would be unwilling to participate in activities without paid-back.

On the other hand, punishing for misbehavior has its own advantages and disadvantages.(这句话记不起来了,大概是这么写的) . Through a mechnaism of punishment, children can learn to distinguish a good manner and a bad manner, which definitely helps to reduce juvenile delinquency. Nevertheless, it would be detrimental to the physical and psychological development of children if punishment is the sole approach.(这句话也有点模糊了,大概是这么写的) Punishing all the time without any appreciation could make children be bully(bullied) and aggressive, and sometimes even go astray.

Given the reasons listed above, I would conclude that neither of the two methodologies are flawless. What we should do is to strike a wise balance between rewarding and punishing and take the advantages of the two approaches to guide children to grow up healthly.


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发表于 2012-4-24 17:43:02 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA


比我写的好,我两次都是6,楼主至少6.5!


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 楼主| 发表于 2012-4-25 05:25:19 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA


考试分数只有6分,有点失望,不过继续努力


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