12天冲刺雅思，作文集中帖

走江湖看我 · 发表于 2011-10-26 17:37:10

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走江湖看我 · 发表于 2011-10-26 23:50:35

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走江湖看我 · 发表于 2011-10-27 00:23:48

占楼先~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~finished

nfshua4689 · 发表于 2011-10-27 06:16:07

预先膜拜一下4个8的雅思帝

zzsth637 · 发表于 2011-10-27 14:56:33

正在准备雅思的作文，作为副审英语很纠结啊。

fg4e1bml1 · 发表于 2011-10-27 17:10:40

冲8的作文，我们这里的人只有欣赏的份，完全没有评点的能力啊。

走江湖看我 · 发表于 2011-10-28 01:31:24

客气了。
从无到8的过程很漫长也很短暂。
找到了方法，立竿见影，找不到方法，抓耳挠腮。
再好的文章，哪怕是外国人，限定在一定时间内都肯定有可以提高的地方，所以请大家帮忙群策群力。

再次声明，这不是一个炫耀贴，所以不存在欣赏或者仰慕。
这是一个励志贴，之所以选择oz就是因为有你这样的高人可以在一路上给予帮助和指点。否则，也不必麻烦，自己闭门造车也就ok了。

其实，个人觉得阅读8分也不是容易的事情，貌似只能错2个，而我是一个很马虎的人，经常倒在单复数或者漏看掉一个not或者类似的东西，所以需要大家多多帮助提携。

先行谢过。

新星高手 · 发表于 2011-10-28 07:46:49

看了文章，水平的确不错

eee333 · 发表于 2011-10-28 08:39:33

LZ 这么谦虚，我就斗胆把大作文的前两段写个修改版，我只有6分水平，不自量力，莫笑莫笑。

Childhood is important for everyone for its profound influence on people's whole rest of lifetime. Therefore, it cannot be neglected that how children should constructively spend their leisure time. (木有给出观点，也可以，不过我的倾向是开头段就给出明确观点)
Educational extra-curriculum activities of course have considerable contribution to one's schooling in many aspects. For example, children can expand their knowledge and improve their primary literacy through reading. Access to fundamental workshop in any subject would benefit children's course work and sometimes cultivate individual's hobby. Spending more time in learning is believed to substantially increase the possibility of future success. It is also worth mentioning that a reasonable study habit can boost one's schooling and life in the rest of one's life. (前面这句有点不扣题，后半句本身也值得推敲) A regularly scheduled reading assignment, for example, can steadily enhance children's academic competency, which might promises a prosperous career achievement.

个人感觉这样更顺口一点。

莼鲈思 · 发表于 2011-10-28 12:58:59

顺便改写一下小作文。

Dear Mr. White,
      I'm really sorry to let you know that i would not be able to start my job next week and I have to apply for a deferred commencement date other than the one we originally scheduled.
      As you probably learned during our interview, that my two-year-old son, Tom, has been in hospital for quite a few days due to pneumonia. Last night I was informed by the hospital that Tom need be transferred to another medical center in order to take an urgent surgery before some damage to the nerve system becomes permanent. Therefore I will take the next two weeks to accompany my son and help him finish these additional treatment.. I'm so sorry for the inconvenience, and hopefully you will understand.
      I am honored to be your employee and this is a great opportunity for me to work for the Company. But the current circumstance of my family literally leaves no choice. Please kindly approve to put off my on-board date for two weeks and let me know your decision soonest possible.
      My sincere apologies.

Best Regards,
Forrest

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