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q0i9kbfe5 · 发表于 2012-8-29 01:30:35

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91考试，这三天开始准备写作，疯狂写了9篇，希望各位上船未上船的高人，帮俺一把：）开始几篇没控制字数，写的有点蒙了，都是300多，过了头了。

因为看了剑桥的范文，觉得考官范文走的都是小清新路线，基本没见到big words，所以俺的文章也尽量的学一学，不知高人们有何看法？

还有一问题请教高手们，为啥我早上写的作文（电脑打字），到了下午，我一点也不感觉是我做过的似的？！有同感嘛？

q0i9kbfe5 · 发表于 2012-8-29 10:10:31

1. Children boarding
Nowadays sending children to boarding school is becoming increasingly popular. What is the reason? Do you think it is a positive development?

Being limited time and energy , many parents send their children to schools which offer accommodation service , with the intention to reduce their pressure coming from caring and encourage them to live more independently. Before evaluating the trend, I intend to discuss the causes for that. (47)

In current society, with two working parents, many family have no enough spare time and energy left to be with their sons and daughters. For many workers, they have to work from the morning to the evening to support the family. When they come home from offices, they have no more than four hours which can be spent before saving enough energy for tomorrow. If they have to take care their children, such as cooking and checking houseworks for them, then they probably have to arrange time effectively, which imposing a continued pressure on them, is a challenge for the tired parents, after getting rid of the intense office work. (110)

Another reason, which is possibly most important, why the father and mother prefer their children to be boarding to being stay with them, is that they appreciate the living lives in schools with their peers. If boys or girls take a boarding life, then they have to and are able to spend more time, and may be enjoy themselves with their classmates. Living with the same age and background, which cannot be archived when living with their parents, the children can develop a more independent and social character. (88)

In conclusion, I believe that taking a boarding life would not only benefit the parents as it lessens the burden for parents, but also the children with such life playing a positive role in developing their characters. (37)
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q0i9kbfe5 · 发表于 2012-8-29 12:28:59

Traffic jam is serious problem of big cities. Government decides to build wider roads in order to solve the problem. Do you agree or disagree? Give the reasons.

What the toughest disturbance that city governors are facing, should be the traffic congestion. While some people claim it can be solved through building roads with wider width, from my point of view, I do not agree with the argument simply as others. (43)

Everyday, including weekends and holidays, our roads are totally taken up by the cars, which carry people from one place to another place. Broadening the roads and streets seems to be an effective way to reduce the rush situation, because it can offer more spaces to cars to run on. But what should be pointed out is that the underlying problem is that it is cars but not roads that cause the jam, which means that widening is just a temporary solution, but not a permanent and feasible one. (89)

Being widening the roads does not settle the problem, there should be some real reasons that should be found to be responsible for it. A situation that should be acknowledged is that no matter how wide the roads will be, there will be an enough number of cars filling them, which means it is too much cars but not no sufficient space that holds the responsibility for traffic. Another reason that can really lessen the jam is the traffic rules, such as allowing some cars to be in some certain roads during assigned time, because they can control the number of running car effectively. Finally, the most important but being ignored greatly factor is the creature behind the wheels. If drivers keeping an order and having enough moderate temper and patience, then the flow would be smooth and there would be less jam even the flow speed is slow, because it is disorder that dedicates more to the traffic blocking than the slow car speed. (165)

In conclusion, after finding out the real causes for traffic congestion, I do not believe that the it would work to broaden the roads. Actually, more other effective methods can be adopted to settle the jam. (36)
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q0i9kbfe5 · 发表于 2012-8-29 15:06:45

3. Someone claim that public transport should be free of charge, others disagree. Discuss and give your opinion.

To citizen, it has been a long history about the discussion to be for or against the charging of public transportation, and there are almost the same amount of supportive evidence that uphold their arguments respectively. (36)

Those people, who hold the support position, probably think it about according to the following reasons. For modern people, the expenditure that is costed on travelling takes up a large proportion of daily pay, especially for the poor. So, if the government can pay it for her people, then people's standard of life will be improved accordingly as they can allocate more income to other aspects of life, such as being trained and being educated. The damage to the environment, coming from car exhaust, also can be greatly reduce, because, among all sorts of vehicles, the private car contribute largely to the pollution. If the authorities take no charge for transporting service, then there will be more traveller taking these offering rather using their own cars, which will greatly relieve the pollution caused by the vehicles. (136)

Other residents, however, have an opposite attitude. They claims that if no charge will be carried out, then it will bring about some disadvantages. One of them is that, for governments, the cost of maintaining this service is a heavy burden, which cannot be born giving the consideration of taking others public services, such as paying for civil servants. The side effect of cancelling that charge, also, will lead to a domino effect, which will result in others appealing, such as calling removing the payment for hospital service. Finally, an undermining result will appear - that is, the more people taking buses and trains, the less automobile will be sold, then the smaller the related industries will be, as a result, the less job opportunities will be created. (128)

In conclusion, I advocate that free charge for public transporting should not be encouraged, because it contribute more drawbacks to the societies and the residents. (25)
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q0i9kbfe5 · 发表于 2012-8-29 17:07:04

4. Children want to watch the same TV programmes and play the same computer games as theirs friends do. Should parents allow their to do this.
　　
Nowadays, there is a trend vexing the parents - that is many boys and girls prefer to turning to the same TV channels and enjoy the same electronic games as what peers are doing. Whether such action should be encouraged or not is a problem that their guardian must face and consider profoundly. (53)

Before making up their minds, parents should learn what the advantages and disadvantages are. (14)

The drawbacks coming from that behaviour can be concluded into a package including some terrible reasons. One of them, which is often disturbing the fathers and the mothers, is that it would result in the homogeneity. This result is not what parents want to face, because it would develop a child into a person without individualisation and reduce the sense of raising achievement for parents. Another reason is that, in many cases, many TV programmes and computer games are not free, if children require the same products as their peers, then some parents would not be able to afford some of them, which would cause dissatisfaction from children. (108)

The benefits, however, should be analysed and understood, in order to help the parents make decision. The first one would be considered is that, if the youngster have the same pattern of leisure, then they would not have the feeling that they are isolated by friends, which would cause them to be more social, because they would have the same topics when they need to spend time together. Playing a same game, such as online role-playing game, also can contribute to develop a teamwork spirit and interpersonal skills for the adolescent because of the requirement to cooperate and communicate effectively and efficiently to win the game. (106)

In conclusion, the youth should not be encouraged to have the same TV channels and computer games in some cases, but most time they should be allowed to enjoy what their peers enjoy. (33)
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q0i9kbfe5 · 发表于 2012-8-30 02:44:23

5. Some people believe individuals are more important in taking care of environment, others thinks governments should be major responsible to it. Discuss and give you opinion.

It is widely acceptable that both governments and individuals should be involved in the environment protection, but the debate of who is more crucial in this campaign is still in discussion around the world. (34)

Some people argue that citizens have more important roles in protecting our surroundings according to some supportive reasons. The one of them, which they emphasize, is the fact that it is the individuals who carry out the final action that can be taken into the practising, no matter how action is formed, which means humans is the actual and final entity. Also, in some cases, such as demonstrations again industrial pollution, it would be much more convenient and practicable for us to show up than our governments, because these cases relate to many stakeholders which cannot be mediated by governments(even the governments are in the list) and they may probably only be protested by individuals. (115)

Others, however, hold an opposite position that, in this campaign, the government can exert more important influence on and contribute to it more effectively. They believe the fact that, being a governing organization, the government has the power to make, such as restricting water polluting and animals killing or forcing people and organization to obey the laws, regulations and rules which can be employed to respect the environment. Also, they argue that, in a global village where the air is full with international cooperation, the rule maker can call for world-wide conferences that can make effective decisions for the good of environment, which cannot be done by individuals. (108)

In conclusion, it seems that there is no single party that is more important than the other, therefore, I am in the place that which is more important, in this project, is really depends. (34)
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q0i9kbfe5 · 发表于 2012-8-30 13:02:59

6. People earn more money than before, so they tend to buy more things, do you think it is a positive or negative. What's your opinion

Undoubtedly, our moneybags are more full theses days and we are more generous to purchase products and services than we were in the past. From my point of view, I would be in the position that the disadvantages of this tendency outweigh its advantages. (44)

Having been pointed out by many people including experts, the reason for my arguments is that, being too keen on consumption, the society has to face many pessimistic facts that she would not to. The first one is the more money we spend, the less money we have. Of course, the life is consisted of buying something and selling something else, so if the pocket is empty, then it would be likely that it will be full again, but the serious reality is that spending is probably easier than earning, for most of us. Not slowing such behaviours, we would welcome the situation at last that we are not able to afford anything any more or be in heavy debt. (120)

Another point, which is learned from the developing pattern of economy is that, the economy is based on the saving and the investment and enhancing consuming means that cutting down the saving and investment is need. As a result, economy slowing will reduce the job opportunities, which impacts us eventually. (50)

Finally, the stronger purchasing ability the society has, the more commodities will be produced. Facing the unending and expanding demand, the producer will be more likely to produce fake or low-quality goods to cater for the requirement. (37)

In conclusion, from the benefits of individuals and societies, in order to have a sustainable life, we have to keep close eyes on the pocket. (25)
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q0i9kbfe5 · 发表于 2012-8-31 00:23:14

7. In some countries, most of people prefer to rent a house rather than buy one,What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a house.

It is a commonplace that most citizens have a preference of renting houses rather than buying houses for themselves in some countries. Being two different living lives, these two patterns have their own drawbacks and benefits respectively. (37)

To rent a house, which is the favourable choice made by most people, probably may be based on some supportive reasons. One of them is with regard to the cost. Housing cost, for most people, is considered as the principle expense. Renting a house would not cost that much as purchasing a house and it can save money for other usages, such as vocation training, educating and commodities purchasing. Another reason why people take that action is that it would be more convenient for them to change housing, especially when they feel uncomfortable or just want to migrate to other places, which means there are more options that they can pick. (111)

There are, however, some disadvantage that should not be neglected when renting houses. It is obvious that living a life without their own houses would make tenants,especially for women, children and the old, bear a sense of unstability of life, regarding the fact that it is more likely to be driven out of the house if the landlord or the landlady wants them out. The increasing rental, also, imposes a threat to those people. Being in societies with inflation, people have to face the reality that almost all the prices are on the increase day by day. Comparing to renting houses, owning their own houses would possess a maximum interest in the long term. (114)

In conclusion, house renting, as a kind of human activity that need balance, would not avoid being in the situation where everything has double folds. (25)
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q0i9kbfe5 · 发表于 2012-8-31 01:13:55

8. Nowadays, people buy food which is already to eat instead of cooking it themselves. Do you think the advantages overweigh the disadvantages?

Sit down, open packages or bags, then begin to enjoy foods seems to be a preferable choice for some people these days. While it brings conveniences to these consumers, I, from my point of view, believe that its drawbacks outbalance its benefits. (42)

Admittedly, the cooked foods bears some benefits, though they do not predominate. Saving the time which should have been spent in purchasing foodstuffs for cooking, is a main appealing feature for some people who choose such food. Also, door-to-door service offered by many sellers, including foods suppliers, takes up a place for that eating habits. (55)

The disadvantages brought by already-to-eat foods, however, cannot be neglected and should be placed in the first position when buying and eating such foods. One of them is the nutrition, as scale products, these foods have less minerals and vitamins than those we by ourselves, because of the different approaches they are prepared. Also, the multi-choice of food materials, which can be achieved by doing it yourself, leave buyer less spaces to be picked, which means they have to taste the same food now and then. What a tasteless life! But the most significant point that should be pointed out is the cooking, as an art, is an essential part of cultures in any societies. If the hoping of keeping and enhancing this art are put on those manufacturer who chase the maximum profit as their motives, then it will probably disappear in the near future. (147)

To sum up, regarding the interest of individuals and societies, the question of which is predominant, between the the disadvantages of the cooked food and the advantages it brings about, I choose the former undoubtedly. (35)
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q0i9kbfe5 · 发表于 2012-8-31 04:08:46

9. Nowadays, some employers give increasing importance to employing people wich social skill in addition to good qualifications. So it is widely accepted that social skills are as important as good qualifications. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The trend of recruiting emphasising the importance of social skills, as well as qualifications, seems to be being a consensus amongst the human resources of organizations these days. As for me, I totally agree with recruiters. (36)

As a recruiting policy, relating to the quality of the staff of companies, valuing the importance of social skills as other characteristics has its understandable arguments. One of them is those candidates, with high social abilities, tend to be having more personal resources which can less be seen in other people. In a competitive market, personal resources of employees can bring more business opportunities, which is the key feature of successful enterprises, to the organizations. (75)

Another reason of taking such action closely links to the employees themselves. It is being seen around us that the worker equipping excellent social skills, in addition to good qualifications, always is more confident compared with other people who possess less social skill but with the same qualifications. Being confident, they are more likely pleased to help others succeed, which can form a good atmosphere of teamwork spirit as the teamwork spirit has been considered by many employers as premises of success of business. (84)

Also, using skills to deal with the surroundings, the employees can create a harmonious working atmosphere. If the relationship among a group is favourable, then the team with enough qualifications would be able to overcome many obstacles and handicaps. (39)

In conclusion, the brilliant social skills can not only bring the most probable value to the organization, but also it can contribute to the interest of other workers and they should be put in the same position with qualifications. (39)
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