annieyang
发表于 2010-8-9 22:30:23
Dear Sir,
I would like to make a complaint about the bank statement I recently received from your bank. It states that I will be charged a $70 fee directly from my account for a $240 overdrawn, which I believe is a mistake.
2.make ---> lodge=>我搜了下，是控告的意思，make a complaint是抱怨的意思。这里抱怨合适点？
5. It states that I was charged with a $70 fee for a $240 overdrawn. =>之前没附上题目，题目里说的是将要charge，所以我理解是还没有charge。
I'm sure that I have never spent this $240 for anything as I have checked all my shopping receipts from this month which I usually collect everytime when I buying something in case of any further confusing. Besides, as you may refer to my bank record, I have had this account for a few years now and have kept excellent records upon using it.
I am sure you will agree that this is a most unsatisfactory situation. Therefore, I hope you can investigate my complaint, and respond by the last day you have set for me to pay that $70. Or I will be insisting a full refund of that.
Yours sincerely,
Joe Jones
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和平看客
发表于 2010-8-10 02:57:59
那两处可以那么用
annieyang
发表于 2010-8-10 10:09:22
的确，我看了下主申写的，感觉平和多了，我太sharp了。。。
annieyang
发表于 2010-8-10 19:42:48
谢谢，记到笔记里了。
annieyang
发表于 2010-8-10 20:38:41
恩，同意。我竟然没改出来这个。。。。
谢谢你的comment，已经改了，在1楼，请阅~
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kiujkcztsw
发表于 2010-8-11 06:36:55
看了一下第二篇的，觉的下面句子都有问题哦。。。
which I suspect might be a mistake
I have used this greatly served bank
I received a letter announced there was $240 overdrawn, as a consequence, I am demanded to pay $70 for it
I want to buy ...
but I failed to book them...
I have queried...
...website which show clearly that...
So I request you to...
I will appreciate ...
有不少Chinenglish，另外标点符号也需要注意，comma 和 full stop.
另外批改是 correct （+ion） 是不是正确些 ?
本人作文就5分水平啊，惭愧...
耀峰理财
发表于 2010-8-11 11:55:34
单数要有冠词定冠词，复数名词可以单独出现
最近一个月 就是上个月 就during the last month吧 免得研究了
ords6306
发表于 2010-8-11 16:03:00
in the past month 我觉得更简单些 不知道这样是否比较chinglish
buy49wsh
发表于 2010-8-12 03:35:39
我觉得6分应该没有问题。
刚刚过去的夏天
发表于 2010-8-12 07:42:02
副申作文的第一句感觉别扭，令人有强烈的中式英语感觉。主申的就好多了。