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Topic: Many people migrate from large cities to small towns for lower living costs and better environment, do you think advantage of this development outweigh its disadvantage?<br />
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In modern society,undoubtely whether or not people should migrate from big cities to small regions has become a hot issue of ordinary people's life. The issue has triggered a heated discussion and generated different views. Some people say that is beneficial for people to live in a small town, while others insist that it is not convenient for people to leave large cities and move to small regions. Personally I think the former is more convincing and I would qualify it to some extent.<br />
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Firstly, the environment of large city is becoming more awful. Obviously the small towns are better in environment than the big cities. It is evident that people suffer kinds of terrible diseases in the modern cities as the result of continually exasperating environment. If people move to regional areas, they can be far away from the risk of pollution and keep healthy easily<br />
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Secondly, the living expense in modern cities is much higher than small towns. Probably we can take the house price as the example. The medium house price in Beijing, the capital city of China is approximately $300,000, whereas it is reported that the medium price for buying a house in a small region near Beijing is just about $100,000. It seems clearly that houses in the small region are more affordable than the large modern city-Beijing.<br />
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Obviously, we can not deny the fact that living in small towns has brought us some inconvinience, such as lack of transports, few shopping centers, and few job opportunities. However these have already been history. The public facilities have always been on-going provided and the job opportunities are increasing as more and more people moving to the regional areas. It will be more convinient for people to live in the small towns than before.<br />
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Having considered all the arguments above, we may safely draw the conclusion that migrating from big modern cities to small towns will bring a lot of benefit to people. Most people can have comfortable lifestyle with good environment and less living cost.<br />
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modernised city - Beijing.
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审题： do you think advantage of this development outweigh its disadvantage
首先要搞清楚 问的是你对 development 的看法。。你文中讨论的是哪里住更好。。
第二。。确定你直接对应回答了蓝色句子的问题了么？..你文中说。。“我”更支持前面的观点。 然后该观点也只是说“beneficial for people to live in a small town”。
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undoubtely should be undoubtedly, right?
谢谢指正。
我觉得我应该是有回答了蓝色句子的问题，Body段的前2段写了从城市搬到small towns的advantage, 一个是环境，一个是房价；第3段写了disadvantage,生活可能会不方便，缺少公用设施，然后话锋转过来说这些问题已经成为历史，生活配套设施在small towns也不断地改善，为后面结尾认为搬到small towns住更好。
能够讲下您对这个topic的思路么？谢谢！
谢谢指正，呵是undoubtedly.
don't scare me~~~any points?
首先要说的是，这个topic 经常考，1月份才考过。 然而 topic 一致并不等于题目一致，反而不认真有针对性地写文章，很容易给人抄袭背诵的感觉。
再谈你是否回答直接蓝色部分句子的问题：
如果先撇开不看题目。我和你做一个会话的练习。 你对应回答： Do you think today's weather is better than yesterday?
你怎么回答我？ 对你的第一句回话，我是不是该 expect： yes or No ？ (准确点是不是说： I think so/ I don't think so)
还是： 今天几度？ 或者 “别人说： 今天下雨了”
最后谈是否针对红字回答： 我觉得题目的中文解释是： （有这样一个既定事实）现在很多人从大城市搬到小城镇，以便减少开资。。。等。 现在问： 你是否觉得这样的“发展/演变”是好处多于坏处？
既定事实已经存在，不是要你比较 城市好还是城镇好。 不需要你比较它们的环境消费如何。
可是 如果你分析这个既定事实，，对城市高度的住房需求有所缓解， 促进城镇发展，降低城乡差异。 诱导政府发展交通。 舒缓城市交通拥挤，有助降低污染。。。我个人认为i那才是对 development 本身好坏的分析。
仅供参考。
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